Saturday, May 26, 2012
Guarding Andrew Gates
Author: Frank Zubek
Genre: Literary Fiction (15 short stories)
How long it's been on sale: Jan 7, 2012
Current price: $.99
Marketing: Twitter and my blog and webpage.
Total sold so far: 5 sales and gave away 73 when it was free on Amazon prime
Link to book on Amazon: Guarding Andrew Gates
Frank Zubek explores the human condition in fifteen unique short stories.
A synopsis of just a few.....
In Belated Regrets: A man in prison asks the detective that put him there to visit him- so that he can admit his regret over killing his wife. But then, the detective has something to say too....
In Mr. Baxter: A woman discovers that her kindly, retired banker neighbor is actually a voyeur with dark intentions.
In A Sin By Any Other Name, two old friends in an adult care facility read that the church in their old neighborhood has been torn down.
While looking at an old family video, a brother and sister discover A Moment Long Forgotten
In A Lack of Combustion, the longest story in the collection at 25 pages, Detective Nick Crowell faces a case where people have been dying from spontaneous human combustion!
Plus ten more stories- three of which have been published around the web.
The stories, if this were an actual book, take up a total of 95 pages. The first thirteen stories are adult literature, the fourteenth is a horror story and the last one has a paranormal element to it and should be considered for readers ages eighteen and up. I hope you enjoy reading them as much as I enjoyed thinking them up and writing them.
First 300 Words:
I hate rainy evenings, I think to myself as I open the door to the condo. I’m soaked and my hair is dripping wet. Shaking out the umbrella, I leave it in the hallway. It’ll feel so good to take a long, hot bath tonight. It's been a day.
I shut the door and place my keys on the table as always but that’s when I noticed that something’s wrong. The place is a mess. The television and stereo are gone and dozens of CD’s are scattered across the floor like the leaves outside.
We’ve been robbed!
As I fish the cell out of my purse to call Ron, I remember he's probably on the subway by now. He might not get a signal.
I glance back at the door and can’t remember if I had heard the familiar click of the lock disengaging or not. Ron had a bad habit of leaving the door shut but unlocked. I had warned him time and again that this was going to happen.
With my heart hammering in my chest, I finger 9-1-1 into the cell pad and keep my finger poised on the send button as I cautiously wander around the apartment to see if anything else is missing.
I stoop down and look through the CD’s that are scattered across the floor. Isn’t it strange the thief only took Ron’s music?
I head into the bedroom and see the drawers to Ron’s dresser are ajar and empty while my dresser is untouched, and it comes to me what has happened. This wasn’t the work of common thieves. I remember I have the cell in my hand and I toss it on the bed. There’s no need for the police.
I like the cover. It's very nice.
The price seems right.
I'm seeing an issue in the product description. There are quite a few writing issues, grammar and use of the word "that." I think the description might be better if you gave a general overview of the book as a total and not talked about some of the specific stories. They're short and I'd rather know the feel of the stories. Literary, horror to paranormal.
I'm seeing quite a bit of errors in grammar. This is usually a red flag for me. Good editing tells me the writer took the time to have a lot of eyes on the book in effort to make it as good as it can be. First person is throwing me for some reason. The first paragraph doesn't grab my attention at all. A robbery was a good opportunity to build concern. You just announced it without description. All of the writing is very mundane and ordinary without any excitement, but then you say her heart is hammering in her chest.
This is a classic case of telling and not showing. You have the bones of a story, but there is no "writing" per say. No description. No feelings. Plus, there isn't anything in the first 300 for me to care about. I don't know the character, you have a robbery pinpointed at the boyfriend or husband, and that is an interesting situation to begin a book with, but you spent the 1st 300 talking about keys, and rain, and CDs.
This story may be interesting in it's entirety, but this 1st 300, or the description, would not entice me to read further, both because it isn't captivating and it's slow, and also because of the grammar issues.
What do you guys think?