tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5142930702674170471.post1423586921564736845..comments2023-02-21T00:26:51.051-08:00Comments on Why Isn't My Book Selling?: All The Colors: a novel about Thailand and the search for life beyond Corporate AmericaVictorinehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06052077366367623323noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5142930702674170471.post-31495714300150414012012-04-01T13:32:54.816-07:002012-04-01T13:32:54.816-07:00The blurb and first few paragraphs of this book re...The blurb and first few paragraphs of this book read more like a "coming of age" story rather than literary. <br /><br />Literary stories (IMO) involve either an incredible use of language, or offer profound insights into humanity. I'm not seeing those features in your book. <br /><br />There are some wonderful literary stories in which the city or world becomes center stage. Perhaps your tale fits under that theme? If so, you'd better start the story in Thailand. Also, you should read some of those books to get a feel for what's expected in literary exotic-travel stuff.<br /><br />Regarding the use of language: "singing in stiletto spiked bursts of incompetence". I'm not sure I understand this phrase. Is the neighbor singing in high heels?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5142930702674170471.post-36239648686286239522012-03-30T13:05:37.904-07:002012-03-30T13:05:37.904-07:00This is kind of outside my range of interests so I...This is kind of outside my range of interests so I'm not going to comment specifically on the cover or content, but what immediately occurred to me is that there may not be much overlap between the Lit Fic market and the 99 cent ebook market. I could be completely wrong, as I said its kind of outside my field of knowledge, but it might be worth looking into and possibly upping your price if it's like I suspect.DDWnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5142930702674170471.post-40327627117760336982012-03-30T10:49:42.883-07:002012-03-30T10:49:42.883-07:00I agree the first paragraph is a turn-off. Reading...I agree the first paragraph is a turn-off. Reading about exams doesn't make me want to read more. <br /><br />Also the font on the cover looks like something a child might do. That and the cover art made me think of some little kid's adventure in a big city, which I assume is not what you were going for at all.Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15317161957206192048noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5142930702674170471.post-79053117107895793382012-03-30T09:53:31.061-07:002012-03-30T09:53:31.061-07:00I want to echo two specific things Victorine alrea...I want to echo two specific things Victorine already said:<br /><br />1) Description needs tightening; After slogging through the entire thing, I felt like I already read a book, and still didn't find the hook you probably want me to find.<br /><br />2) Opening paragraph vs. second paragraph: love the latter, hate the first. I liked the character in the second paragraph. Too bad he whined a lot in the first...Meg Silverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03919607581424128410noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5142930702674170471.post-77611930789821980132012-03-30T09:45:05.497-07:002012-03-30T09:45:05.497-07:00From the title, I thought this was going to be a n...From the title, I thought this was going to be a non-fiction book about someone chucking it all up to move to Thailand. <br /><br />The cover isn't bad, but the artwork needs to be sharper.<br /><br />In the blurb, the author talks about a trip to Thailand. That sounds more like a vacation than a move. The rest of the blurb sounds like he's actually moved to Thailand and gotten a job there. Which is it?<br /><br />I like the opening, but there is a problem here:<br /><br />that awful… walled-in machine <br /><br />Why is there an ellipse between awful and walled-in?<br /><br />I noticed some of the same problems in the blurb. <br /><br />Definitely a professional cover and I also agree with Vicki. Change the title to All the Colors.Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04832055618604176686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5142930702674170471.post-46333669749933988892012-03-30T09:43:49.972-07:002012-03-30T09:43:49.972-07:00This is the author Eric Fisher and I think your co...This is the author Eric Fisher and I think your comments are quite helpful. I agree the intro, cover and title could be effecting sales. I appreciate your feedback.Eric Fisherhttp://www.ericfisherbooks.comnoreply@blogger.com